At that moment
(that most unexpected moment)
when all the world was seemingly asleep
(except me)
the phone rang
( :: missed call :: )
a message was left
( :: voicemail :: )
my heart sprang up with delight
(quickly dialing and .... *smile*)
and for just a few minutes
(a happy few minutes)
the sun was shining bright even in the dark
:)
I like this one best, as a whole. And once again, I like your last line best of all.
ReplyDeleteHamlette: And here I've been thinking that this one maybe wasn't all that great! The more I read it again, the more I wasn't sure. So thank you! Your encouragement means more than I can tell you.
DeleteOh my, you have a ridiculously gorgeous talent for making regular life into beautiful poetry.
ReplyDeleteKeep writing. Keep telling stories.
You have been given this gift. And it's amazing.
Deborah: This was a moment worth documenting! I just haven't been sure that the way I wrote it worked....So thank you! This was encouragement I needed today.
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